Alcibiades Alcrost

[Alcibiades]

Player Name: Alcibiades
Name: Alcibiades Alcrost
Age: 23
Race: Human
Height: 6"2'
Weight: 180 lbs
Physical Description: Slim, athletic but not unusually powerful. Brown hair, brown eyes. "Peeking eyes and peaking nose..."


Powers or Strengths:

Studied fencer

Alcibiades is an agressive and sometimes reckless swordsman. For now he is limited by his agression and his relative inexperience, but if he survives to older age he will probably become one of the great swordsmen of the world.

Military Experience

Alcibiades has led men in battle even at his young age, and is well aquainted with the general field of military tactics.

Brilliant

Alcibiades is capable of learning anything he sets himself to. It might be said, however, that he rarely takes things seriously.

Weaknesses:

Amoral

Though he often appears to do so, both to others and himself, Alcidbiades does not follow any set moral code. He is prone to kill, betray, steal or lie all without the slightest notice or the slightest stain on his conscience, though he is also capable of unusual acts of virtue and magnanimity. Those who know him for a long time come to think he is "changeable as the weather" trustworthy one minute and untrustworthy the next, not really evil or even self-interested, but merely unstable as well as spiritually unconcious.

Clanless and Lawless

Alcibiades has little respect for place and authourity, even for others and himself. He wanders through the world mostly artless and unthinking, forming and breaking attachments and heedleessly offending those who expect more of him. "A mind in a body" one person once said of him, "A brilliant mind and a brilliant body without a soul in the whole thing."

History:

Youth

Alcibiades is, like the authour who created him, that notorius breed of bastard child which sometimes plagues the world we live in. Being without race or class, he was born into the city of Thucydelia and received into the temple for raising as a priest. Here he amazed his tutors with his knack for reading sermons and translating ancient texts, as well as his remarkable personal virtue. At the age of 13 he was taken under the personal tutelage of Alcrostius, a local philosopher of great renown. Unfourtunately as soon as he received his freedom he turned for the worse; wide reports of his virtue were turned to murmurs over his late-night revels and his frequent swordfights. Many times his tutor Alcrost came into mansions or temples of prostitutions to drag his pupil home flailing, but at last they had it out and the break between them was complete.

Adolecence

Shortly after their argument Thucydelia went to war with the great empire of Pashran. Alcibiades distinguished himselves in a series of battles, so much so that he was elected a general at the age of twenty. After playing a key role in the crushing defeat of Pashran at sea, he returned covered with laurels to his native city, where he was awarded its highest honors. Admiration settled down, however, when he was elected to the city senate that year. His office soon gained a reputation for being rife with courption as he used his power to give kickbacks to his drinking friends and escape punishment for his own revels. Just as he led another army out to battle rumours flew through the city that it was he and his drinking friends who had been responsible for tearing the toga off the statue of the goddess Helena and painting the member of Diosticles purple the night before. Just before the army went into battle word got about that one of its generals was being called back by the city fathers to answer for religious crimes. Though many urged him not to do so, promising that he would have justice if only he went to clear things up, Alcibiades stormed out of the camp and finally cursed the city of his birth.

Adulthood

Being without any principles or anywhere to go in the world, Alcibiades turned himself in to the Pashtanni king. At first this king ordered him executed but when he saw that Alciabiades had no fear of this punishment he changed his mind, putting the boy in charge of one of his armies and tasking him to defeat the city that raised him, whereupon the foundling made good use of his knowledge as well as his natural military talents and brought his former city to heel. The greatful king of pashtaan offered him governorship of the city but, disdaining the land of his birth either as a member or a king of it, Alcibiades declined, asking instead for his liberty and, in leiu of a payment to him for services rendered, that a like sum and a large estate be given to his old tutor Alcrost.

Having nothing but his weapons and his freedom in the world he decided to wander that world and see what advantage he could find in it. His passions were cooled a little from his early youth though he still fooled around. And so two years of wandering brought him to Thar Shaddin and the city of Mar.

[Niabi]

First of all, you need to add more information to all the sections from physical description to weaknesses.

Now as for the history, I must say that a lot has happened in only 23 years. I think you might do better to either increase the age of the character or remove a few things and focus more on who he is and how the events in his life have helped shape him into the person he is now rather than cram the sheet with an impressive list of achievements for someone so young.