Strolling through the woods with his axe the large man stops in front of a felled tree, the tree has many shallow grooves stabbed into one end of the tree forming a point an obvious sign that someone has cut the tree down looking at one of the branches there is a small tag with a large unknown animal footprint on it almost circular .
looking down at the tree the man smiles and bellows out "haha! it took you from dawn to midday to fall down, don't worry ill leave a sapling near your stump" Picking up a nearby saw he starts sawing at the base of the trunk and picking up speed as he looks at the tree in a daze.
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in front of a small mammoth in the midst of what could only be described as chaos a group of were-men are sawing a tusk off a large mammoth as its corpse slowly bleeds onto the icy plain riddled with spears and arrows, the were-men look towards the smaller mammoth before grinning and picking up their spears. seeing this the small mammoth runs of into the chaos that is a mammoth hunt
the were-men put their spear down and continue sawing as the tusk stars heavily fall...
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ing to the ground as the logger picks up the large as small table if you put legs on the bottom round bit of wood he just finishing sawing up "i should trade for a cart or maybe build a sled it would be easier to pull, probably make more money to haaa" letting out a sigh "hopefully Felloak isn't selling their wood to cheap this season"
Name:Gurdash Throngbeard
Age: 32
Race: shifter Mammoth
Appearance:
Human: with brown short hair and a medium brown beard Gurdash is as hairy as hairy can be, standing at around six feet tall and donning a large body would make most people be weary but when you stare at his face you see will always see a large welcoming smile.
Mammoth: Large Brown wooly mammoth with long tusks
Possessions:
a small logging hut in the forests near marn
a little 2 room logging hut self built by Gurdash complete with stone and wood furniture and a wooden bed lined with animal furs
a two-handed wood cutting axe
it's slightly bigger and heavier to fit Gurdash's size other than that its not special in any way
Animal traps
For catching small to medium sized animals like rabbits or foxes
Powers or Strengths:
Strong (human/mammoth)
craft:Logging (human/mammoth. I don't really feel like its necessary to shapeshift in to a mammoth to cut down a tree but i guess he could hold it in his trunk and swing the axe that way)
Weaknesses and Flaws:
Silver (human/mammoth)
no combat training
Flammable: while fire is not his weakness he is very hairy in his mammoth form and can catch on fire easier,he is also slightly flammable in his human form for the same reason
headstrong
paranoia: hunters (both from living in the woods and the fear of being hunted as a mammoth by other shifters)
Gurdash Throngbeard
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Gurdash Throngbeard
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- Name: Gurdash Throngbeard
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Gurdash Throngbeard
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Re: Gurdash Throngbeard
Hello and welcome to Thar!
I’m afraid Gurdash is extremely powerful by the standards of Thar Shaddin. I would recommend starting with a more humble character. Even a baseline troll is usually not recommended as a first character! I’m afraid Gurdash is both unlikely in the setting and unwieldy for roleplaying.
For starters,
“strong physique looking at Gurdash's size would even turn other trolls to look again and a staggering highet of 11 feet taller then most tall trolls”
This is fairly difficult to comprehend. A half troll being eleven feet taller than even the tallest troll makes him truly gigantic at twenty some feet. A half troll being taller than a full-blooded troll is already borderline impossible, considering the size difference.
Next, the city of Marn is a xenophobic and isolationist place. The town of Shim is even more so. His family owning a well-established farm with a fully operational smithy built to their highly nonstandard specifications would imply that they are exceptionally wealthy people: something very hard to swallow when his ancestors are barbarians from barren, frozen plains in the north.
Finally, you must consider power relative to a baseline human being. As emphasized earlier, Gurdash is currently far too strong to be allowed. As written, he could easily kill any other character we have ever approved on this site, which I hope is plainly unacceptable. He has all the regenerative power of a troll, making normal weapons useless, and complete immunity to magic, making that option even more useless. I’m not certain we even have a single mage on the entire website, either player or NPC, who can actually cast a classical fireball.
Ultimately, your weaknesses don’t balance him out: they are far too narrow or do not actually inhibit him. I’d like to emphasize that not having magic of his own is not only already not a weakness, it is an outright fabrication. He can shapeshift, regenerate, and is immune to magic. Any one of those three is assuredly magic in nature.
In summary: your character is implausibly well-off in all categories: economically, socially, mentally and physically (having received all of the benefits of his dual parentage except a completely superfluous half-form). A character needs to be defined by their limits, and it currently seems like Gurdash either has what he wants, or could easily acquire it. Nothing could challenge a character of this magnitude without a serious shift in the genre of the entire forum; even if I were to approve him, you would be left with almost nothing for to challenge Gurdash. That’s no fun for anyone! A narrative is defined by adversity, and unless we radically change the genre of the setting to cause dubious amounts of silver and fire-mages to spring into existence, I’m afraid there isn’t much here for Gurdash!
You've mentioned a background in D&D, which I personally have a deep seated love affair with that I'm sure annoys everyone in our chatroom. So let me say it this way: On Thar Shaddin, our characters are level one and never stop being level one.
If you remain interested in roleplaying in our narrative-heavy atmosphere, please take the time to check out some of our approved characters!
A more typical example of a first character:
http://www.tharshaddin.com/rp/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=2776
A troll example. Notice that it at one point explains how to kill her with a common rock:
http://www.tharshaddin.com/rp/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=3537
A reasonable example of a character expected to fight frequently. Notice how much attention is still given to personality:
http://www.tharshaddin.com/rp/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=3138
I’m afraid Gurdash is extremely powerful by the standards of Thar Shaddin. I would recommend starting with a more humble character. Even a baseline troll is usually not recommended as a first character! I’m afraid Gurdash is both unlikely in the setting and unwieldy for roleplaying.
For starters,
“strong physique looking at Gurdash's size would even turn other trolls to look again and a staggering highet of 11 feet taller then most tall trolls”
This is fairly difficult to comprehend. A half troll being eleven feet taller than even the tallest troll makes him truly gigantic at twenty some feet. A half troll being taller than a full-blooded troll is already borderline impossible, considering the size difference.
Next, the city of Marn is a xenophobic and isolationist place. The town of Shim is even more so. His family owning a well-established farm with a fully operational smithy built to their highly nonstandard specifications would imply that they are exceptionally wealthy people: something very hard to swallow when his ancestors are barbarians from barren, frozen plains in the north.
Finally, you must consider power relative to a baseline human being. As emphasized earlier, Gurdash is currently far too strong to be allowed. As written, he could easily kill any other character we have ever approved on this site, which I hope is plainly unacceptable. He has all the regenerative power of a troll, making normal weapons useless, and complete immunity to magic, making that option even more useless. I’m not certain we even have a single mage on the entire website, either player or NPC, who can actually cast a classical fireball.
Ultimately, your weaknesses don’t balance him out: they are far too narrow or do not actually inhibit him. I’d like to emphasize that not having magic of his own is not only already not a weakness, it is an outright fabrication. He can shapeshift, regenerate, and is immune to magic. Any one of those three is assuredly magic in nature.
In summary: your character is implausibly well-off in all categories: economically, socially, mentally and physically (having received all of the benefits of his dual parentage except a completely superfluous half-form). A character needs to be defined by their limits, and it currently seems like Gurdash either has what he wants, or could easily acquire it. Nothing could challenge a character of this magnitude without a serious shift in the genre of the entire forum; even if I were to approve him, you would be left with almost nothing for to challenge Gurdash. That’s no fun for anyone! A narrative is defined by adversity, and unless we radically change the genre of the setting to cause dubious amounts of silver and fire-mages to spring into existence, I’m afraid there isn’t much here for Gurdash!
You've mentioned a background in D&D, which I personally have a deep seated love affair with that I'm sure annoys everyone in our chatroom. So let me say it this way: On Thar Shaddin, our characters are level one and never stop being level one.
If you remain interested in roleplaying in our narrative-heavy atmosphere, please take the time to check out some of our approved characters!
A more typical example of a first character:
http://www.tharshaddin.com/rp/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=2776
A troll example. Notice that it at one point explains how to kill her with a common rock:
http://www.tharshaddin.com/rp/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=3537
A reasonable example of a character expected to fight frequently. Notice how much attention is still given to personality:
http://www.tharshaddin.com/rp/viewtopic.php?f=15&t=3138
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