Sky Khaleh

[Sky Khaleh]

Name: Sky Khaleh
Age: 20
Race: Shapeshifter
Height: 5 ‘3
Weight: 70 (Hollow bones)

Family===

Mother----Amara Khaleh- A shapeshifter able to hold multiple animal forms.
Father----- Unknown but out there somewhere, her mother seems to think his name was Jaq, or maybe it was Pyrite?...
Brother---- Nico Khaleh- He was a street urchin adopted by Amara when she was in Shim, she brought him back to save him from starving. He is roughly four years younger than Sky.



Physical Description===
Sky is small, and sometimes has been mistaken to be much younger than she actually is. Her body type is petite and she is very fragile, this is due to her bones which are lighter than a normal because she is permanently shifted halfway into a falcon her bones are hollow. Also due to the shift with the bird she has wings that are constantly with her. The wings are large, giving her a wingspan of around 20 feet they are the same mixture of whites, creams, browns and black as a falcon.

Her hair also has taken on the snowy white color of a falcon’s breast and falls to the middle of her back. Her skin is pale, almost glowing in the night. Her eyes are a striking blue, like the sky in the summertime with no clouds in sight.

Despite being small she has a woman’s body. She tends to wear overly large clothing, attempting to hide her physique. She likes to wear cloaks, not realizing that it doesn't help her look any less off due to the large lumps on her back when she wears them, but she thinks it helps. It doesn't. She wears a knit hat, with her hair pulled into it.

Possessions===
* She wears her mother’s necklace, it is a simple piece of leather with a feather wrought in gold, the pendant is small, and fits inside Sky’s small palm.
* Sky keeps her wooden bow slung on her back along with a few wooden arrows that have her own feathers used in the fletchings.
* A cloth sack she keeps her food in and that doubles as a blanket.

Powers or Strengths===

Flying:

Sky has the ability to fly, she has been told by her mother how some people don't except things that are different, and people that are not human. Sky is afraid to fly, she thinks that she will be seen as a monster and be pitied. She struggles with the way she looks, to her the giant wings on her back are a sign of how, even with her own family, she could not fit in. Her mother is a powerful shapeshifter, able to take on any animal she chooses but Sky is stuck in the same form. If people were to find out about her deformity she believes they would stab her in the back and leave her to bleed out cold and alone. Sky can count the number of times she has flown on two hands.

Her flying ability is limited to the condition of her wings, if her muscles are to sore to lift her she won't be able to fly well. Her bones are hollow and pretty easily broken. She is lifted by her muscles and wings, not by any kind of magic.

Though Sky is rather clumsy in the air so far, she hasn't quite gotten used to flying. Here is some more detailed information involving speed and stamina. This is at the peak of her flying ability which she is far from achieving. She has only flown a couple of times.

Average soaring/horizontal speed:
65-90 km/h
40-56 mph

Maximum horizontal speed:
105-110 km/h
65-68 mph

Average Diving Speed:
105-110 km/h
65-68 mph

Stamina: Currently she is limited to flights lasting about fifteen minutes, at her peak when her muscles are developed she could fly for the maximum of ten hours, but that is pushing herself to the point she would fall out of the sky.


Hunting, Tracking:

Growing up Sky's mother taught her how to plant a garden, when to plant what vegetables, and also what plants she could eat in the wild. Her mother also taught her how to hunt, and track. She was pulling a bow back when she was nine, and got good with it fast. Soon she was bringing home rabbits, and small birds. When the garden didn't grow well Sky would leave to go hunt. She learned how to track as well, her mother taught her how to run game trails and what animal had been in the area and roughly how long ago. Tracking came easily to Sky, unlike the magic her mother had tried to get her to harness.


**She may grow into her full ability as a falcon shifter later on

Weaknesses====

Her body is incredibly frail, because of her hollow bones. Although she has wings she could use she is constantly afraid someone will see her flying and figure out what she is.

When she covers her wings with a cloak it can make her look like a hunch back, and at first glance when she is clothed in her tattered garments she comes across as a deformed street rat and is often glared at like a hump is something that is contagious.

(also Personality): Sky is a wanderer, she enjoys seeing new landscapes and different people. Her feet are always telling her to move, that there is something better beyond the horizon just out of her reach if she could only travel a few more miles before daylight. She is quick to anger, and quick to run if she doesn't like a situation.

She fears commitment to anyone, because she is scared if she let someone see her for what she really is they would cast her away, like a broken doll that can no longer talk. She is often over whelmed by the sights and smells of large cities, she grew up knowing only her small cottage with her mother and brother.

Deep down she aches to be accepted, to be loved. Growing up she heard great tales of romance and chivalry, she wishes she could find her own story to fall into. She wants someone to tell her she's not a mistake, and she's not an abomination. She would give anything to just be normal, to be human. Sometimes she thinks of cutting her wings off, her mother even caught her once with feathers and blood on her hands holding a rusty knife. Her mother told her she was special, that she had been given a purpose somewhere. Sky just wants to be normal and for people to not stare at her whenever they lay eyes on her.

History====
Sky was born far away from crowds and out in the country, in a small cobblestone cottage. She is her mother’s only child by birth. Her mother, Amara, taught her about the world as she grew. She taught her how to live outside of the cities and not to rely on others. It was just Sky and her mother in the cottage, her father has never been in the picture. Sky asked about her father when she was smaller because in the books her mother read to her there was always a father, Amara said that her father had been a great man full of courage and strength but she would always cry as she said it. Deep down Sky knew something was wrong.

Her mother would occasionally make trips to Marn and bring back tools, rice, along with some things they couldn’t make themselves. One day her mother brought a young boy, she was 9 at the time and the small shabby looking boy was somewhere between 4 and 5. Her mother told her she had found him in Shim. The boy became her brother, he never spoke of his past not even his name. Amara gave him the name Nicholijah, Nico for short. Nico is human and Amara is a shapeshifter. Sky always thought she was a shapeshifter but she could never change forms, she was stuck looking mostly like a human but with gigantic wings on her back.

Amara taught Nico and Sky about the Astral Plane and the great war that took place so long ago. She also taught them her belief is coexistence between humans, magic, and other creatures. Amara warned of the people who didn’t agree with peace and would rather starve out magic than let it run freely. She believed that if two shapeshifters and a human could live together in peace everyone else could as well.

As she grew her mother taught her about weapons, warning her of the other things that live across the plains. She said there were monstrous creatures, ones that would drink the blood from your veins and even things that hunted anything that moved and ate it. Amara helped Sky carve her first bow, her mother had to travel for almost two weeks to obtain the correct wood. Sky had a knack for shooting her bow, her brother loved to watch her stop scrawny rabbits in their tracks. When Amara saw her skills with a bow she introduced her to the art of tracking, reading the signs of the land around you to find prey.

Sky never left her cottage except to hunt and gather some plants that grew nearby. She loved her family but she had to leave, she had to find out why she couldn't shift and who her father was. Sky left on the morning of her twentieth birthday, setting out with just the clothes on her back and knife on her ankle. Her soul had grown restless within the cottage, she hadn't realized how much she needed to find a place in the world till she stepped out the front door. Her heart raced for the first time in her life. She never knew how sleeping on the ground made your bones ache the next day till she left, but she can't look back. She will make her family proud and when she gets a home she will make sure they never have to want for anything.


Expectations for Character-====

I created a character that came from a nondescript area out in the middle of no where so I could see the towns and different cultures through a new character's eyes. I want to learn through my character as she learns. I made her into a wanderer so she can experience several places, and in turn I can learn about those places. She will make some mistakes, but through the mistakes will come strength.

I plan on her finding a place where she is happy, with friends and maybe a cute guy she likes. Later she will develop into her full power as a shapeshifter, which means she can loose the wings, but she has to accept herself before that can happen. I want her to experience the highs and lows of life in a crowded town.

After she accepts her struggle with shifting her character will have changed. She will no longer be a wanderer, she will have found her meaning and maybe someone that accepts her as she is. She will have changed from quiet and timid to outgoing and sure of herself.

I would like to bring her brother into the city later on, maybe as a low ranking guard. I would like to have him in the picture to help Sky out every now and than so he is there for her.

[Sky Khaleh]

((Sample of a bit of my writing, I couldn't help it, what can I say I like to write.))



Sky watched her brother Nico from the hazy window pane, he was playing out by the garden building what he called a “fairy ring”. Nico carefully placed small stones in a circle around him, deciding just the right place for each stone. He pushed his messy black hair out of his eyes and bit his lip obviously in deep concentration. Sky couldn’t help but smile, he was so convinced he would catch a fairy and convince it to grant him three wishes. If fairies do exist Sky doubted they would grant wishes, much less wishes for things like toy swords and child-sized capes.

Nico enjoyed the stories her mother read every night before putting them to bed, in fact Sky had caught him once or twice with one of the old leather books clutched to his chest because he had fallen asleep reading it in the moonlight. They were stories of great kingdoms, full of princes and princesses, along with monsters that would eat even the bravest knight.

“Sky!” Nico had rushed inside while Sky was lost in her thoughts and was tugging at her deer hide pants.

“Yes, young knight?” She said ruffling his hair. Although Sky was fourteen and Nico was somewhere around the age of nine or ten Nico was just a few inches shorter than her.

“The dragon is coming, you have to sit down in the fairy ring so you can be safe!” Nico yelled at her, throwing his whole body into pulling her outside.

Sky barely kept her balance, Nico weighed more than she did and it was only by sheer luck she didn’t lose her balance and fall to the ground. “Young knight, I am feeling rather chilly I think I am in need of a dragon coat.”

Nico giggled, running out the rotted slat of wood that served as a door. She watched him swing his large stick, or rather his silver sword. Sky stretched, unfurling the wings that she was born with on her back. They were huge, almost touching each wall of the small cottage. Creams, blacks, and browns that ranged between the color of sand to the deep almost black of tree bark bathed in darkness all played throughout the shinning feathers. She had a piece of wool her mother had knitted for her tied over her breasts, giving her wings complete flexibility. The feathers from her wings started at the base of her neck with soft white down, gradually growing into the stiff large wing feathers and then fading back to the softer smaller ones stopping at her tailbone.

Amara, Sky and Nico’s mother was out looking for apples to bake with the cinnamon she had bought the week before. Sky suggested they give Nico a birthdate several years ago so he could have a birthday every year and they could do something special for him. Today is the Nico’s official tenth birthday and his favorite food is apple cinnamon cobbler. Sky’s family doesn’t have much in the way of money, but they are at least together. They do the best with what they have.

Sky is proud of her mother, she is proud of her home despite how small it is and the holes that need patching in the roof. Sky does not need to rely on others, they can sustain themselves on the garden and the landscape around them , even when they have a hard winter Amara still kept food in her children’s bellies.

[Metarie]

Hi Sky!

Nice talking with you in chat.

I recommend dropping the succubus aspect. The succubus motif requires a PC to be affected by the character's abilities without the opportunity of negating it. I can see you are trying to limit it in the description, but I think you'd be better served with a simpler first character. If you have your heart set on writing a succubus, then you need to expand upon both weaknesses and strengths so we can be comfortable with her as well as think about how she will fit in your chosen location for her (such as Marn, Eyropa, or Corezo).

Other reasons include the wings - there's no hiding a 20' wingspan under a cloak. They are going to poke out or she's going to have a worse hump than that guy from Notre Dame

On a technical/writing aspect, please make sure to put spacing between paragraphs. I added them to the app, but not the add-on you provided. Don't forget, the biggest aspect of the site is writing with others and others need to be able to read what you've written

[Sky Khaleh]

Alrighty, fixed it. I do intend for her to look like a complete Gargoyle with lumps on her back, tends to bring around questions. I apologize for the spacing, I swear I thought I spaced them correctly, maybe this is a bit better?

[Metarie]

After reading, I had many questions. Sky feels not quite fully fleshed out or thought out. Meaning the aesthetics are there (she's a shifter, with big wings), but the depth of character is still an unknown for you as a writer. I'd like to see more about who she is, not what she is.

What are her dreams and aspirations?

What motivates her?

Why is she afraid someone is going to figure out what she is if she flies? Should it matter? If they are law-abiding, then they would register her as a shifter and be done with it.

She might experience some discrimination and be viewed as a freak because she's permanently got wings.

Explain the shadow magic - what can she do with it? what can't she do?

Is there or was there a dad? What happened to him?

Why does the mom not know the day on which her son was born?

Other notes: A cottage outside of Marn or Shim would put them in the Sooquoi Plains, a very unsafe environment.
She is a shifter and wears silver, you'll want to fix that anachronism.

The strengths and weaknesses still seem a tad insubstantial. Is she afraid to fly full stop or just afraid to be seen? What does she do well? What is incapable of doing? How does her frailty affect her ability to do anything? like what?

What do you want out of this character RP-wise?

[Sky Khaleh]

Edited the shadow part out, she's pretty resourceful, she can think on her feet well she doesn't need it. I added the flying information, speaking from experience with shooting at birds when I duck hunt, wings are very fragile things. There is no way she could over pwer any character the most she could do is fly away but all it takes is a well placed rock and she will be down.

[Metarie]

Good, good.

I think you've got a decent foundation now!

Watch that spelling and grammar (too vs. to; then vs. than)!

Go ahead and give Sky a go. I've edited the growing into her own as a shifter piece to limit it to being a falcon. I'd like to see her grow and you grow with our community before bringing in a whole slew of new skills and challenges.

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