Bregol Hir-Alderon

[Bragol]

Formal name - Bregol Hir-Alderon

Commonly used name - Bregol Alderon

Alias (only used by closest friends that he has met on his travels) - White Hawk

Age - 19

Race - Elven

Height - 6'3

Weight - 165 lbs.

Physical description - Bregol is a tall lean Elf. He has long white hair that he wears down, with two braids on the front that he pull around to the back of his hair. He has Ice blue eyes. He also has extremely fair skin. His body type is lean and athletic, from all the walking,running, and hunting he does. He has narrow eyebrow along with a narrow nose, that gives him a pompous air about himself. He also has thin lip and a hardened face. He has tattoos covering his arms, torso, and legs, that are a mix of tribal and celtic design. His back is covered in long scars as if made by a whip, that are still distinctive through the tattoos.

Possessions - The clothes on his back, and a small satchel of gold that he keeps tied to his belt.

Weapons - Bregol keeps a short curved hunting dagger, mainly for tight situations, strapped to his side, He prefers to use his Ashen Long Bow that he keeps strapped to his back along with a quiver of arrows. He uses this to keep his distance from an altercation. He also keeps a small knife tucked in his right boot.

Armor - His armor is just a simple leather jerkin and some leather greaves, that he wears over his clothes. These allow more movement and freedom. He also wears a dark blue hooded travel cloak.

Clothes - He wear a white long sleeve cloth shirt, a pair of dark colored pants, and a pair of leather boots.

Accessories - He wear his family pendant around his neck, and his fathers silver engraved ring around his left hand middle finger. The engraving says "The master cometh, and reaps." He also wears a leather belt with a silver buckle, that has elven writing around the sides that end with his family name on the back of it. He doesn't know what the elven say because it is in an ancient dialect that he wasn't taught.

Powers/Strengths - He is fast and very agile. He is gifted with a bow and arrow, from being taught at a young age, and uses it regularly for hunting for his food. He can get by with his dagger, but is not near as proficient with it as he is with his bow.

Magical powers - He can use the wind to calm his friends, in mild use. It's not so much the wind, as it is the wind gathering pheromones from various sources, like plants animals, and even other humans. he acquired this ability at birth from his Mother's side of the family. He likes to use this to make sure that scuffles can be avoided if possible. When his emotions changes the shade of blue in his eyes change also.

Weaknesses - His arrogance is his biggest weakness. He is overconfident and that sometimes leads him into trouble. He also has a fear of fire. If he tries to overexert his power to calm people, he passes out. He also get fatigued at random times, attributed to how his emotions are acting.

History

Bregol was born into a small elven tribe,in a small forest in east Norroenirlund, where his Father was the leader. His mother died while giving birth to him, and in consequence that led his Father to believe that Bregol was the problem. He treated him badly. He claimed he was teaching him to be a leader and that was why he was harsh, but it was really just an excuse to use the bull whip on him. He was taught how to hunt and survive on the land as a kid, and when he would mess up, he would be punished. He hated his father, but kept his mouth shut. When he was about 15 he was sent out on a hunting trip to bring back some meat. He was gone for three day by himself. Upon returning to his tribe, he found all his people slaughtered, including his father. He went to his families tent, and even though his place had been ransacked, he found his few family heirlooms. He dawned them with a new found respect for his family. He hated his father but now he missed him. He was now alone, left to wander the world. He wanted revenge but didn't know where to start. He was a wanderer, set out to see every land. It is four years later, he is a hardened man, skilled in the ways of the land, as he enters the City of Marn. It is one of the last places that he hasn't seen in it's entirety. He doesn't know if he will stay and make this his new home or if he will make allies and leave. It's hard to contain a wanderer.

[Niabi]

I would like to see this power of his explained in greater detail and I would like to see the history expanded. Where is he from? Why did he come to Marn? Who are these close friends if everyone he knew was slaughtered in this raid?

[Bragol]

I edited my post give me some more feedback if you feel I need it.

[Niabi]

I'd like to see more to this.

[Bragol]

When you say you'd like to see more of this, do you mean you'd like to see this out in the world interacting?

[Niabi]

When I say it needs more I mean like I would like to see more depth in the character sheet. I want to see some personality come out. I want to know how he got his magical ability and why he wishes to use it on other people. Why does he want to calm people? Where are these friends of his? You said in his history that everyone he has every known were slaughtered. What sort of long term effects has he suffered from the abuse he received as a child? How has the abuse changed him? Is he an abusive person now or is he more likely to try to please people and cower from others that might hurt him? I really just want to see you expand on what you already have to make a more well-rounded character.