Darien Locke

[PrimalCurse]

Player Name: PrimalCurse

Name: Darien Locke

Age: 23

Race: Human

Height: 6'2"

Weight: 210 lbs

Physical Description: Darien has an average build, by which I mean not beefed up completely but not overly thin. He has long scarlet hair that hangs down in front of his right eye. He wears a white dress shirt and black dress pants with army boots under a long black trench coat. He also has a faint crescent shaped scar running from his left ear to the opposite corner of his mouth.

Possessions: -A medallion in the shape of a snake wrapped around a tree. Given to him by his mother (the symbolism is unknown at the present time, it is the only keepsake he has of his parents)

-A fine steel rapier he keeps on the left side of his belt (used with right hand)

-A silver pocket watch on a chain in his right interior coat pocket (this was stolen from Alastair while Darien still attended the school)
-A pewter flask of fine whiskey

-A leather wallet on a chain in his pants pocket with an undisclosed amount of cash.

Powers and strengths:-He is very proficient with a rapier. (He is very fast and adept with his rapier. This is one of the skills he learned at the school.)
-He has a very large cash flow. (This i due to the fact that he has men allover the city robbing and stealing for him, as well as his legitimate businesses.)

-He owns a small troupe of actors. They often play at the theater in Marn. (This is a major source of income for him.)

-No magical abilities thus far.

-He is very agile and quite adept and dodging attacks. (This makes him quite swift in combat, he excelled in physical classes at the school.)

Weaknesses:-His left ankle is prone to flare ups of pain. (This will temporarily disable him at certain times.)

-His greed has been known to cloud his judgment. (He finds it (hard to pass up a good deal no matter what the consequences, and will do almost anything for money.)

-Often has troubles sleeping due to nightmares. (This often causes him to be tired therefore making him less agile and weaker after having these nightmares.)

-For some unknown reason he is weak to magic. (This causes him to take extra damage when hit with magical attacks. Even healing magic while healing his wounds makes him feel sick to the stomach.)

History:Born in an unknown area of Eyropa, Darien lost his parents at the age of 6. He has no memories of his parents save for the medallion that they left him. He was taken in by a church orphanage and was raised by very pious people. Never agreeing with the ways of the church Darien ran away from the orphanage at the age of 14. He ended up in the town of Trelham where he lived on the streets for two years.
Darien was eventually taken in by a rich man named Alastair Rowan who ran a school for boys. Darien did not excel in his studies but soon developed a small following of young boys who wreaked havoc around the school. His years of trouble making culminated in the murder of Alastair and his self exile from Trelham. Ashamed of himself he fled to Marn to escape his horrible deed. Things did not become better when he reached Marn, he was soon back to his criminal ways and had once again developed a following. Only this time instead of being small boys they were seasoned thieves and murderers. Very few of them have been caught, but the ones that have will not reveal any information about Darien. For years now he has plagued the town of Marn remaining just ahead of the law.

[Niabi]

There are a few things I would like to discusses with you about your app.

1. You have a pocket watch listed as one of his possessions. Such a level of technology would be considered hard to come by and would have to gnome engineered. We don't mind if your character would like to have a piece of gnome technology on him but we need to explain how he came in possession of such an item.

2. The strengths and weaknesses that you have listed lack any description. We would like a brief summery of each strength and weakness so we know as to what extent they make him either stronger or weaker.

3. You have listed that he has a seemly endless supply of cash, from where does he get this money? Did he rob the wealthy man that he murdered? If so, I don't see him being capable of fleeing the city with a vast supply of wealth and not getting caught. As far as making large amounts of money from being a thief on the streets of Marn who has avoided the eyes of the Guard, I don't see that happening either.

[PrimalCurse]

I went and checked into the areas you brought to my attention, and I modified them to what I hope is your liking.

[Frug]

Hi PrimalCurse. I'm afraid we've discussed it and after reading and considering your profile, it's not quite up to what we require in terms of depth and detail. You might want to have a look through the links in our community section for a forum with fewer restrictions.

[PrimalCurse]

Alright thanks for the advice I will look at the areas you mentioned.