Please add sections for his Strengths and Weaknesses. Also, how much of the arm does the arm-guard cover?
And please leave gaps between your paragraphs, that makes them far easier to read. I struggled when reading the Appearance and Background sections.
Other than that, all looks good to me.
Max "Maximo Joe" Joyfield
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Sir Karsimir
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Re: Max "Maximo Joe" Joyfield
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Sir Karsimir
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Re: Max "Maximo Joe" Joyfield
Character approved.
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Normally we structure character profiles like this (see list below). The format is not essential and you're profile covers all of this so no changes are necessary. This is purely for ease of reference.
Player Name: (optional but good if you already have a character)
Name: (of your character
)Age:
Race:
Height:
Weight:
Physical Description:
Posessions: (anything they own or keep on their person)
Powers or Strengths: (including stuff like magic, money, martial arts, etc.)
Weaknesses:
History: (be descriptive with your history, this is what tells us if you're capable of putting effort into your writing.)
My faith protects me, my kevlar helps.