Alright thanks for the advice I will look at the areas you mentioned.

I went and checked into the areas you brought to my attention, and I modified them to what I hope is your liking.

Darien had always enjoyed the theater, the twists of reality thrown forth from the stage. This time however he wasn't focused on the play it self, his attention was stolen by the actress playing the part of Nicolette in The Kings of Dremor. He glanced down at his program and saw that her name was ...

Player Name: PrimalCurse

Name: Darien Locke

Age: 23

Race: Human

Height: 6'2"

Weight: 210 lbs

Physical Description: Darien has an average build, by which I mean not beefed up completely but not overly thin. He has long scarlet hair that hangs down in front of his right eye. He wears a white ...