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See if that's better.

Just go ahead and tell me what to change based on what I have.

Real Name: Adrien LaRue
Nicknames: Roux, Rue
Known Personal Aliases: Roux LaRue
Age: 18
Race: Human / Mage
Distinguishing Marks: Blood red bangs

Physical Description:
He is a slender young man standing at 5' 6". His face is clean shaven, his skin lightly tanned, his eyes a bright emerald ...