Thar Shaddin

Name: Barga Margo

Age: 22

Height: 6 feet 1 inch

Weight: 180

Gender: Male

Race: Elf

Hair/Eye Colors: silver (short) hair/ navy blue eyes

Equipment: Leather armor with some ring mail underneath, leather chaps, metal wrist lets, circlet with iridescent red gem set in the center, Soft boots for speed and silence, a small but very sharp dagger at leg, and finally a rapier at the waist.

Powers: Telekinetic, Illusions, Animal domination (control).

Healing (weak only small cuts)

The ability to read minds ((doesn't know how to control it yet, it just happens some times) will get stronger the more it happens later)


Weaknesses: extreme cold

Physical Appearance: Barga looks like a youthful MALE elf of the age of 21-22, silvery white hair (short), blue eyes, a scar across his Lower right cheek across his eye lids, a lean physical build, apparent of good (not excellent physical strength), very agile.

History: Barga Margo is said to be a descendant for a race of Magic and small weapons such as daggers and rapiers, some called them the assassins of the law because they protected the royal family with assassin like skill. users trained to protect the royal ancestor called the micarku. one day when he was guarding the prince who was next in line for the throne, an assassin slipped past his guard and killed the prince. because he failed the king banished him from the land for ever (age 17)

his parents are dead in the service carku[/i] in the art of using a rapier and that he should all ways be on guard for enemy's no matter wear you are or how peaceful the place is.

His skill in the rapier is unparalleled when fighting others with his skill at the rapier, he can swiftly weave between attacks and find weaknesses in armor with which to drive his blade through.

while another leader taught time the magic of illusions that he knows now, the technique of illusions that he uses is to scare or frighten the enemy by making look like there are more then one of him, making himself look bigger, he can also make things such as walls and shadows for him to hide behind so that he may hide behind them and seek refuse.

when he was banished he was lead to a swamp and left there, after many days of wandering the man known as Barga Margo found a great body of water (the sea). he swiftly built himself a raft of timber and vines and sailed to an island called Darleone where he helped save many people from some weak monsters that were terrorizing the village, a woman from the village gave him the circlet he wears new which is said to allow him better control over his magics (age 21).

after his adventures on the island of Darleone he said east till he came to a great landmass, he wandered for days on the landmass until he came upon a place known as Thar shaddin.

This profile is a little short and needs some work. It doesn't need to be extremely long, but some more thought should be put into the character. At the moment, it just looks like a skeleton.

As it says in the rules, your application is what shows me what sort of writer you are and how much effort you put into this. To that end, please start by fixing punctuation and capitalization errors and then give more description about what sort of a person Barga is.

For instance, he's young at 22 so who are his parents and how did he arrive in Thar Shaddin? Is he looking for something? He's wearing armour, but why? Thar is isolated so travelling here wearing ring-mail suggests he's expecing to fight someone. Does he know physical combat? How well? Where did he learn? What sort of illusions is he capable of producing? And so on...

i like the site but after checking out how it works and what is required i dont think im a good enough writer for this kind of thing.

That's up to you. It depends what you're looking for.