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Korax O'n Monthun

Posted: Tue Aug 06, 2013 2:47 am
by Korax
Name- Korax O'n Monthun , meaning "Korax, middle class member of the Monthun Clan"

Gender- Male

Age- Unknown (20-25)

Race- Monthuni I Many would consider him human upon first glance, and in many ways, those who do are correct. With no distinguishable differences in appearance or wit, in manner or visage, the only aspect of which renders his peculiar race "not-human" is their innate ability to detect and hunt with supreme ease by sensing the life force of others around them. This feat evolved through centuries of the Monthun Clan's harsh life upon the wastes of Pal Tahrenor, where the food is scarce and life is near unbearable. This unique trait made way for food to be found, whether it be flying through the sky or burrowing through the dry, dehydrated "soil".

Physical Description- Draped in bloodied, cumbersome animal skins, bound tightly to their bodies in leather and carrying nothing but their valuables and means of survival, the Monthuni dress to survive, not to please. Korax's ragged bleach-white hair is carried down across his face, his defined chin protruding outwards and piercing blue eyes cutting through the cloak of white. His body is well built, but by no means muscular. His height ranges from 5' 10" to 5' 9", depending on his apparel.

Possessions- Korax at all times carries with him a carved ivory hunting blade, depicting the moment in which he slayed a mammoth single handed, the coming of age ritual all Monthuni must complete. Mentioned earlier, all of the Monthun Clan carry with them a satchel of food ( containing dried meats and herbs) and their means of survival. For Korax this is a length of mammoth sinew, wooden steaks and long sticks (used for erecting a tent and setting traps).

Powers and Strengths/ Weaknesses- Since Korax is Monthuni, respectively he has the Monthun sense, allowing him to sense creatures and dangers near him. Since all Monthuni possess of this ability however, he, along with everyone else, takes it for granted. Korax is an superb hunter, and when fighting other Monthuni or humans, he can usually catch them off guard and finish battles quickly, of course aided by his extra sense. However, when engaged in direct combat, Korax has a hard time holding his own without the help of others. Korax can also stalk with great ease and becomes virtually invisible in the wild, but in the midst of civilization he sticks out like a sore thumb, negating all means of a ambush or suprise.

Flaws- Korax's life with the Monthuni have rendered many of his social skills ineffective, lacking the means to persuade others and to express himself fully, Korax has a much harder time interacting with people then most. Additionally, he has a very hard time respecting the law and following social conventions properly. He is also majorly emotionally damaged from an event that takes place in the story below, though I want you to discover it for yourself.

History- Korax O'n Monthun was respectively born into the Monthun Clan. There he spent most of his childhood and teens. Throughout most of his early years, everything was as carefree as it could get in the harsh wastes of Pal Tahrenor. Through his early childhood years, Korax grew normally and cared for nothing but play. He had been raised by a middle-class mother and father, their family job being to care for and distribute the food amongst the clan. As he grew older however, Korax's demeanor towards this lifestyle grew sour. In fact, his whole family had always longed to be seated in a higher position of power, though never acting upon this idea. Soon, he began to sense an ever closer dread on the horizon. He had become ever more suspicious of his parents, playing with the idea that they would stage a coup and break out of their cast, and gain the name of "Koal'n". Some nights he would hear them quietly whispering. Other nights, when he awoke, they would have vacated. However as time went, he had all but forgotten about his ordeal. He became more focused on preparing for his coming of age ceremony and soon enough, he was tasked with it. He'd completed it of course 'lest he would not be here, but it wasn't over. One night, he witnessed something irreversible. Something so disturbing, he would never recover. Their clan leader, Shal Koal'n Monthun, was heard screaming one late night, Korax and his two brothers awoke, frightened, finding their parents gone. Only seconds of hesitation had gone by when Korax ripped open the thick tent door, and sprinted to find his parents. He and his brothers made to the Koal'n (Clan Master's) tent, pausing for a moment, they finally pulled back the heavy leather that shielding the tent from the harsh cold of the outdoors. What they came to find was their mother and father, bloodied by blood, and stained by the liquid of guilt. Stunned and horrified at what just transpired, Korax could not move, his most primal instincts taking over. Slowly, his parents stood up to face the three, a look of sadness crossing their faces, however convincing, Korax saw through it. Instantly, he understood. This wasn't a random murder, this was a planned coup, and he and his helpless brothers were ruining the plan. He rapidly clutched their arms and pulled them off into the distance, never looking back. In the next year and a half, he had barely survived. Korax, along with his two helpless blood, wandered the wastes in distress and found themselves lost to the direction of the fabled Ofriyu Mar River. In the first year the youngest of his siblings died of cold. However, The next half was the hardest. There came a point where he had to make a choice, a point where the matter was truly of life or death. That night he committed an act that I do not have the confidence to write about here, that night, for the first night in weeks, he ate...

Soon enough, Korax made it to the town of Shim, that is where his story begins.

Re: Korax O'n Monthun

Posted: Wed Aug 07, 2013 7:16 pm
by Saruna
Hey there and welcome once more to Thar! In order to get a detailed idea of new, original player races we ask for a small write up here, in world dev.



One question to sort of help me get a better idea of the character -- is this a primitive tribe who have limited to no outside connection with the rest of the world? Steel is fairly common; though there is not much infrastructure for the type of mass production we see in present day in our world, it is not the miracle metal it would have been during the Iron Age and before. The reason I ask is because of his ivory hunting blade. To most in Eyropa, ivory would likely be a luxury sort of material, and if they're mammoth hunting they'd be able to trade for steel and other useful items.

How far away can Korax sense creatures? What specifically does he sense when he senses danger? Intent?
Korax is an superb hunter, and when fighting other Monthuni or humans, he can usually catch them off guard and finish battles quickly, of course aided by his extra sense.
Do you mean this in the sense that he is good at surprise attacks?
Korax's life with the Monthuni have rendered many of his social skills ineffective, lacking the means to persuade others and to express himself fully, Korax has a much harder time interacting with people then most.
Are the Monthuni as a whole emotionally or socially stunted? I'm not really sure what you mean by him having a harder time interacting with people than most.
Additionally, he has a very hard time respecting the law and following social conventions properly.
Which laws? All of them, including his peoples'? Do his people not having any laws or social conventions of their own?
He is also majorly emotionally damaged
In what way is he emotionally damaged, and how does it affect him day to day?

He had been raised by a middle-class mother and father, their family job being to care for and distribute the food amongst the clan.
I would like, in your write up of this people, for you to detail how the clan is set up and what their interaction with the wider world is. The reason for this is that it forms the basis of who Korax is and what he expects from the world as well as informing his interactions with people.

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