Thar Shaddin

Bio: A good looking, slender man, Aezur started life as an street orphan. He is quick-witted but rash and un-yielding. At the age of eleven he was caught stealing dried fruits from a local merchant. The guardsman on duty, a man by the name of Logan, took pity on the young boy. Though never taking him in, Logan did teach him the ways of the blade and the morals that still govern him today.

Upon turning nineteen, Aezur was recruited into a special unit tasked with locating and neutralising rogue mages. His skills with a blade greatly improved with the exstensive training and he was taught the skills of mental fortitude, to protect him against some of the lower level magic attacks. Promoted to squad leader after just six months for his prowess, he was deemed 'The Draco's' newest star investment.

It was shortly after this he was ordered to neutralise a local guardsman by the name of Logan. It was also at this time he was declared an enemy of the state by the faceless superiors he refused.

SKILL: Advanced swordsmanship
Low level null-spell
Agility
INV: Custom silver rapier
Sturdy leather breastplate
Vials of volatile liquid
STR: Inteligent
Charming
Formidable fighter
WK: Stubborn
Ruled by emotions
Prone to act before thinking
Despises magic users

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